Butch Girls is moving along. I have twenty-something pages written/rewritten/edited. Lorna gets paid again next Friday and I hope to get a printer then. With the printer I can remove myself from the laptop (gasp!) and take it a page at a time, at random. I have found this helps me with seeing the grammar and structure without falling into the thrall of the story (as if!).
I am still fighting with the opening first line. How do you say ‘her cell phone rang and she answered it’ in such a way that the reader wants to continue? It was ‘she hammered the nail’ before that and ‘the cows were the most chakra aligned’ first. Dangit! Poor Kelly, trying to do her business, living after the death of her partner, and yet still feel something. Then there is Grace, single mom trying to work and raise a kid. Then there comes along this fix-it lady….